Genre:
YA Contemporary with a Speculative twist
Word Count: 64,000
Pitch: Teen genius Daniel Frank's desperate experiment brings his
first love back to life. Now she's dying again, doctors are baffled, he's
running out of ideas, and she's running out of time.
Excerpt:
Waiting for Jane at the bottom of the
staircase, I have this weird, jittery feeling, but I’m trying not to fidget
since her dad and her grandma are standing right next to me. The slightest
movement seems to echo off the marble floors in the entryway, and the only
other sound is her grandma’s breathing. I feel like I’m in a funeral parlor or
something.
Crap, I still can’t believe Jane
asked me to prom.
She told me I should come meet her
dad, but he’s barely said a word since he opened the door to let me in, and I
can’t think of anything to say. I keep looking up at the top of the staircase,
hoping Jane will suddenly appear.
Her dad clears his throat. “Did you
use stem cells?”
“Wh-what?” Wow, I totally wasn’t
expecting that. “I mean, yes.” I guess Jane must have told him about my
internship. “Our research used stem cells, but not the embryonic kind.” I try
to smile. People are usually happy with that answer.
But her dad just makes this ‘hmmph’
sound, and his expression doesn’t change.
Jane’s little sister is hiding behind
a doorway, staring at me. I kind of wish I could hide too. Underneath my rented
tuxedo I’m covered in sweat—thanks to the bike ride over here—and now my skin
feels clammy. “We were able to successfully revive dead organs.” I
glance down at my polished black dress shoes, then back at her dad.
There’s no hint of a smile on his
face.
Please, send first 75 pages to Uwe Stender.
ReplyDeleteThere is something so vividly authentic about the voice in this that grabs me SO hard. No easy thing when the pitch hits home that this is very much under the spec fic umbrella! That isn't easy to do and you have NAILED IT.
ReplyDeleteI picked this one as I loved the concept of a love that transcends death. It had a bit of a Frankenstein feel to it as well, which I love. I could really feel the urgency and desperation in the pitch to try and save Jane.
ReplyDeleteThe excerpt drew me in. The writing was strong and I really liked where it was starting out. I had in my head what was to come and that it's hard to have someone thinking that way from a pitch and short excerpt.
The intro tugged at my heart strings. And I totally felt the awkwardness of the scene. Well done! Congratulations on your request.
ReplyDeleteThanks, everyone, for your interest and kind and encouraging comments about my entry. I appreciate it more than I can say!
ReplyDeleteI love this concept, I'm a huge fan of freaky human experiments gone wrong (or right). The writing is solid, this is for sure something I would read.
ReplyDeleteA lovely concept and sweetly written!
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