Genre:
YA Myth Adaptation
Word Count: 64,000
Pitch: Aaryn wants to become the next great cupid.
His mistake? Shooting Karma, a ballet prodigy who’s traded her future for the
love of a selfish jerk. Now, Aaryn’s been banished to Earth as a human.
Excerpt:
I saved my arrows for
last.
It was a warm night on
Earth for my first assignment. Phoebe, my mentor, worked from the shadows, her
slender body appearing indestructible as she lifted her bow, her skin like
milk.
“Aaryn,” Phoebe said.
“Those two.” Golden shivers of light passed through the arrow she notched into
her bow, and when she retracted, the fletching made a dent against the apple of
her cheek. Her coal-lined eyes focused on two teens standing by the door of the
high school.
Even though we were
invisible, the teens seemed nervous. The girl cast little glances at her date,
who was busy wiping his palms down his suit pants.
Phoebe paused.
Narrowed her gaze.
With a snap, a glittery
path tore through the air, the arrow disintegrating with a burst of light
through the boy’s tie.
Phoebe slid a cool glance
in my direction. I’d never experienced the arrows like that. I’d devoured the
class material and studied more than I would ever admit. Now, right before my
eyes, love was beginning to unfold. The punch of my heart seemed to chase the
next shot.
Phoebe placed a second
arrow against the silver wire and brought the girl into her sights. The arrow
flew and disappeared. Wow.
The teens held each other
for a long time. They kissed. The whole thing was amazing, really. Two humans
who hadn’t even reached adulthood, who’d barely started to learn about life,
and they’d already found their soul mate.
“You’re up,” Phoebe said.
$20 :)
ReplyDeleteI will be sending pages, but Jessica gets a head start. :)
DeleteThank you for your bid!
Melissa
One house (with arrow-proof windows), please.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
--The Iron
Thank you for your bid! I've sent my submission and look forward to hearing from you.
DeleteSincerely,
Melissa Gorzelanczyk
So much awesome here. The concept, the voice, the writing! I totally want to read more of this one!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kimberly! I love how supportive this contest has been. I hope you can read more of my book in the near future!
DeleteIf I saw this on the shelves at B&N, I'd totally pick this up! I fell in love with it last night and still love it this morning. It sounds like the Cupid and Psyche story completely flipped on its head, which is awesome.
ReplyDeleteCongrats and good luck!
This is one of the best compliments I could ever dream of. I hope you find it on a shelf someday. Thank you for your kind words!
DeleteI love new takes on mythology and I love Cupid. The fact I've got a Cupid short story coming out in an anthology later this year may have swayed me a little. But what really sold me was the writing. So strong, such a great voice and such vivid imagery. Love it. Perfect to come out for V'Day 2015 :D
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for picking my entry! You were an amazing host for TeamAwesome. I love your release timeline, too. :)
DeleteYou have to let me know when the anthology publishes. I'm dying to read your story.
Sincerely,
Melissa
Nice to see how popular your entry and pitch was, Melissa. Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteAdorable concept! Love this line, "Two humans who hadn’t even reached adulthood, who’d barely started to learn about life, and they’d already found their soul mate." =)
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